Never free


“What I’ve felt, what I’ve known never shined through in what I’ve shown. Never free, never me …”

~ Unforgiven – Metallica


Never Free

Inexperienced thirst,
torments of sorts,
transpired on pale skin,
life can no longer subdue
the agony, the intimacy.

Juvenile desires,
depleted, drained through
razors and pseudo bubbles,
the heart ignores dismally
the flames, the vows.

Peerless melody,
strings of unforgiven guitars,
elegance of  illusions left,
dreams that will never shine,
drifting minds, never free.


To my silent muse …


“While My Guitar Gently Weeps” by Sonam Mandal


© 2011  Broken Sparkles


19 Responses to “Never free”

  1. deadpoet88 Says:

    Wow, it blew my mind away. Amazing poem Bee! And yes I can see Metallica’s influence in it. Great piece!

  2. liv2write2day Says:

    That 2nd stanza really jolted me. Good stuff, Blaga.

  3. Jamie Dedes Says:

    Am with Victoria on this one. Fine work altogether but the second stanza is a whopper. Many vivid images here.

    Happy weekend, Blaga! Hugs!


    Sadenning somehow but lovely poem .Haunting imagery-elegance of illusions left, unforgiven guitars—loved it!

  5. Mihir Vatsa Says:

    Such poignant words!

  6. seabell Says:

    So you have been tormented by “strings of unforgiven guitars”… Good for you!

  7. Ina Says:

    Good poem as always from you, I love the whole thing. .

  8. Jingle Says:

    very poetic and stunning words.

    you rock.
    Happy Potluck!

  9. charlesmashburn Says:

    Well done and most enjoyable! Sad in a cleansing way.

  10. Kavita Says:

    Wow..woww.. and again, WOW!!
    A freedom that never was, that never will be… loved the way you wrote it, summer gal…

    The guitar shot by Sonam, and the poem TOTALLY had ‘unforgiven’ echoing in my ears.. to the point that I HAD to play it on my iphone… heheh..

    Really liked your wordplay in this one! Very .. well.. lyrical.. yes, it was lyrical!

  11. bendedspoon Says:

    glad that you’re free to share this one — so wow! :)

  12. mindlovemisery Says:

    Fantastic poem! I love the last stanza shear brilliance. Great song =)

  13. ALIVE aLwaYs Says:

    a lovely poem indeed!
    the thought is beautiful too, never free, never me………exquisite.

  14. Olivia Says:

    dreams that will never shine,
    drifting minds, never free..!!

    I hear you well Twilight!
    So much of yearning and sadness have been conveyed through your words.. heartfelt!
    The image is a perfect shot by Sonam.. you know that don’t ya?

    hugs xox

  15. dragonkatet Says:

    This was a sad but thoughtful piece. Did it help you to write it? I hope so! I think it’s brilliant that you were inspired by a Metallica song. :)

  16. southwindtrails Says:

    I liked this poem alot, very sharp and clear. The crispness worked very nicely!

  17. Cherlyn Says:

    I’m so behind…sooo behind, so sorry. But I am still determined to catch up, no matter how long it takes.

    I love this poem, especially the first stanza. It’s something I can definitely relate to.

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