Chains of rain

Chains of rain

The skies have a crazy look tonight.
Smitten by the cavort of the thunders,
luscious blue sheering into ferocious purple.
Why do the hearts bleed looking at the crying clouds?

A requiem dedicated to the silk spread.
No star in heaven can carry the bitter tunes,
only the winds, those beats of empyrean souls.
Why did the rainbows have to fail, dismally or otherwise?

The  games with lions in my dreams and
the sun laughing: ” Poor you, I told you so!”
Forbidden line is crossed, chains of rain- unleashed.
Why can’t I hide in the ocean of your eyes?

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“No Escape” by IrisMommy2007 on DeviantArt

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© 2011  Broken Sparkles

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44 Responses to “Chains of rain”

  1. Kavita Says:

    Anytime, sweetie! I just wanted you to do what you love doing! :)

    Besides, I needed some inspiration myself… and now your awesome poem here has reminded me of such nights, and those nights are begging me to write about them!!

    Your splash of dreamy words here is EXACTLY what I needed!
    So.. thank YOU!!!! :)

  2. booguloo Says:

    Love the first stanza especially. Nice write and I hope the water level doesn’t rise any further or you might be in trouble. Smiles…

  3. seabell Says:

    And I love the last stanza… So very beautiful!

  4. K. McGee Says:

    I can’t do it! I just can’t pick a favorite image, line, or stanza. They are all absolutely amazing! :D

  5. Julian Javier the Cyber Mushroom Says:

    lovely dreamy styled poem. beautiful!

  6. Mihir Vatsa Says:

    Its actually good. I loved the very first stanza and the last line. They were really deep.

    Cheers!

  7. Blossom Dreams Says:

    Awesome imagery here my friend…and you have written this with such a magical, dreamlike quality!

    Chloe xx

  8. Jingle Says:

    magical.

    you are indeed masterful writer.
    cheers,
    Happy Rally.

    :)

  9. Wine and Words Says:

    We had thunderstorms today. I love them. Such power and energy. I want to hide, but also expose myself. Such a play of wills. “Smitten with the cavort of thunders”. Yes! Exacty. You have described me. Bravo!

  10. dragonkatet Says:

    There are just a couple of minor grammar tweaks I would give this that kind of bugged me as I read. I adore the whole poem and the feeling behind it. There are just a couple of things that made me stumble as I read. If you want me to tell you what they were, I’ll e-mail ya. If not, just know that I really liked both the sounds and imagery in this, Blaga. Love the assonance in the title! And that’s a *perfect* picture for it!

    • Broken Sparkles Says:

      Corina, feel free to always correct me, I’d love to learn something out of all this, not only receive a good pat on the shoulder. Would love to hear where I’ve been wrong, e-mail me! Thanks for the comment, always! Happy days!

  11. Henry Clemmons Says:

    Love that line about about hiding in the ocean of eyes.
    ENJOYED!!!!!!!! much.

    http://henryclemmonspoet.blogspot.com/2011/06/stray-rays-poets-rally-45.html

  12. BUTTERFLIES OF TIME Says:

    This has great, fantasic imagery, soars of emotions, …drew me in… held me captive till the end. Sweet emotion made the poem a pleasure to read.
    “only the winds, those beats of empyrean souls… -absolute beauty of a line.

  13. meiro Says:

    I live the last stanza.
    Beautiful as always and I enjoy reading your work.
    Hugs

  14. Leo Says:

    I’ve asked myself those last line questions of each verse quite often.. Not from the same point of view though..

  15. pure2core Says:

    “luscious blue sheering into ferocious purple.
    Why the hearts bleed looking at the crying clouds?”
    And
    “Why can’t I hide in the ocean of your eyes?”
    Had made me fall in love for poetry…gr8 job…..

  16. Ina Says:

    wow this is so good…

  17. Chimnese Says:

    beautiful love poem you have weaved in these words…

  18. mindlovemisery Says:

    Breathtakingly beautiful. I really wish I could form more coherent words. Great job

  19. Catie Eliza Says:

    Wonderfully illustrating the storms of sky ans heart. I want to get out there and get drenched and sing and maybe cry. :] xx

  20. kez Says:

    lovely and very evocative …thank you !

  21. magher1 Says:

    Beautiful ending… Love the imagery in your poem. Nice!

  22. RiikaInfinityy 마왕 Says:

    :D i love the last verse, totally caught everything as one:P

  23. Jamie Dedes Says:

    Lovely! I enjoyed “the cavort of thunder” and “beats of empyrean souls.” Nice work, dear Blaga.

    Thanks for il Divo. Beatiful!

    Hope everthing is okay there these days …
    I’ll write over the weekend.

    Hugs!

  24. Fred Says:

    Absolutely love this. The speaking and the language are fantastic. Thanks for posting:)

  25. Sam Says:

    Beautiful poem Blaga, ” the games with lions in my dreams ” , this is pure poetry…

  26. Paulami Says:

    the last two lines are very powerful. amazing poetry.

  27. Cindy Eksuzian Says:

    Real poetic color in a dance between nature and your feelings. This is remarkably beautiful! Cindy

  28. Becca Givens Says:

    “Smitten by the cavort of the thunders” at the beginning and “Why can’t I hide in the ocean of your eyes?” — favorite imageries captured in a beautifully written piece!! :-)

  29. Bonniestormcloud Says:

    Oh this is beautiful the last line is a wonderful way to end this write <3

  30. Hema Says:

    Wow. Thats beautiful.
    I loved the line ‘ Why do hearts bleed looking at the crying clouds’….there is a lot of empathy here.

  31. liv2write2day Says:

    Blaga, this is so imaginative. I could feel the rain, hear the thunder and wind, experience the emotions. That makes for good poetry.

  32. yelena m. Says:

    as always, you are the master of rendering emotion and imagery in the most mindblowing way…your poetry is truly the food for my soul…thank you a lot for sharing your talent, Blaga.

  33. swanrose Says:

    Why can’t I hide in the ocean of your eyes?

    that is very sweet… Nice work on this piece.

  34. Jamie Dedes Says:

    Just checking in to see if anything new popped up. Will check back tomorrow. Sunday there already! Phew … Another week ….

    Ditto Yel’s comment. She’s so good and so right on.

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  36. deadpoet88 Says:

    Damn girl, your imagery is so vivid! Excellently written, I cannot get over how amazing each line is. Too good!

  37. danroberson Says:

    Vivid imagery and powerful words challenge the senses,
    Open the heart and tear down defenses,
    “Why do hearts bleed looking at the clouds”,
    Feelings have been trampled for being so proud,
    “Why can’t I hide in the ocean of your eyes?”
    I can’t find an answer after so many tries.

    Your wording is superb. Excellent lines.

  38. Kiran Bashir Ahmad Says:

    The last stanza really does its work. Surprises, twists and lands right into the heart with a splash. Lovely!

  39. Cherlyn Says:

    A i love the last line the most, a heartbreaking poem, I’m sure I’ve been there before. Thank you for sharing!

  40. Androgoth Says:

    You have a wonderful flow with your poetry
    Broken Sparkles, and the energy within strikes
    with such a refreshing touch to your work…

    Do have a most exquisite rest of day
    and equally a delightful evening also…

    Androgoth Xx

  41. Subhan Zein Says:

    “The skies have a crazy look tonight.
    Smitten by the cavort of the thunders”. This is my favotire part! Thanks for sharing the wonderful poem! :-)

    And by the way, I write poetry myself. You may want to take a look at my blog: http://www.subhanzein.wordpress.com. “Whirling Towards the Divinity” and “Love is the Water of Life” are two poems that may be of interest to you. :-)

    Kind regards,

    Subhan Zein


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