Asian girl

There was this asian girl sitting next to me in the bus going to work today. She was talking on the phone and I couldn’t understand a word  from her language, but I somehow decided that she was talking to you. What is the possibility – you just one of many asian guys in the other end of the world, to have a connection with exactly this asian girl sitting next to me at this end of the world? I guess the chance is one in a million, if not zero. What made me go into that conclusion?

Her smile looked like life is full of beauty, like the voice from the other side of the telephone wire was not just talking to her, but letting her see the fresh smell of the rain, letting her feel the breeze of spring. Exactly like this was my smile when I first met you, when I could feel the flames in your words. Her voice so low but confident, exactly like my voice when I knew for sure I was reaching out to your limits of the eyeless passion you had for me. Her breathing, exactly like mine when you were telling me all these stories of us being somewhere… on the beach, in the mountain, in a room under the ground or just at home, anywhere but together. Even the way she was sitting, so elegantly fitting in her skin, her body one with the chair, exactly like I was feeling everytime I’d close my eyes and see myself in your arms.

Maybe I’m just overreacting, still trying to swallow down the fact you’re not around anymore? Maybe I was not completely awake this early in the morning and Ms. Imagination was playing tricks with my senses? But maybe right now there is a man near you, speaking Greek on the phone and you wonder if on the other end of the line is me making him so happy? Maybe I will never know …

"Asian girl" by zaynho on deviantart.com

© 2011  Broken Sparkles


26 Responses to “Asian girl”

  1. Jamie Dedes Says:

    Well done. A wonderful and imaginative short story. “Ms. Imagination” at her very best. Enjoyed! Thank you! :-)

    Good Morning! I’m getting ready to go to bed soon. Ha! Have a great day, Blaga. Keep that imagination fired.

  2. Eric Says:

    I liked the way you expressed your own loss and longing through the Asian girl’s phone conversation, even though you didn’t understand what she was saying.

  3. Jessica Says:

    Very mysterious, Blaga! I shall hunt around Oxford for someone talking in Greek on a mobile!
    It’s funny listening to peoples’ phone chats and wondering who they are talking to – a wife? a girlfriend? a mistress?
    I enjoyed your little story!

  4. Bodhirose Says:

    A lovely story, Blaga. You had it being told from such an interesting angle–listening to a phone conversation and wondering if it might be your ex-lover. Very creative.

    I saw your link on Victoria’s blog today.

  5. souldipper Says:

    A great work of art, Blaga! Truly – a unique display of how a broken heart can trick us.

  6. liv2write2day Says:

    Oh I loved this. Very creative expression of loss, of an unfulfilled relationship. Using 2nd person was perfect. Just one expression I wasn’t sure about: “your limits of the eyeless passion”…not sure what eyeless passion represent. So glad you shared this, Blaga

  7. BUTTERFLIES OF TIME Says:

    Oh! Blaga , such creative imagination–putting yourself in such a situation and then writing so beautifully about it–must have even hurt you a little –glad you shared this piece.Very inspiring, to view love from such a different yet refreshing perspective.

  8. deadpoet88 Says:

    Great story, I guess we all ponder over the same thought about the voice on the other side of the phone. Well written, I love how you’ve portrayed the Asian girl’s feelings as compared to your own.

  9. Jan Freeman Says:

    Great story Blaga – very perceptive and deliciously intimate.

  10. Vishwas Anand Says:

    Intriguing story:)Liked the speculative aspect:)

  11. Cherlyn Says:

    This is absolutely fantastic! Your writing skills just keep amazing me. I forget sometimes that something so simple as riding a bus can be turned it something so poetic, so emotional, and so moving – thank you for reminding me that every moment in life can be inspirational :)!


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