I remain

I remain

how brave you stand
illusions over illusions
no dragon can win
the starry dust
in your eyes
i dare you
keep me asleep
if you can

butterflies of time
let them dry the tears
ashes of ancient myths
let them whisper secrets
i dream to know you
hopeful i remain

how weak the sun
rises next to me
no mortal charm
can erase the flame
the pearls of a kiss
you chase me
through the wind
i hate to be awake

colors of the sea
let them wash the salt
thorns of beauty
let them crumble the pain
i save your scent
calm i remain

until there is the rain …


Inspired by “I remain”- Alanis Morissette

"Sparks of passion" by kfc79 on deviantart.com

© 2011  Broken Sparkles

40 Responses to “I remain”

  1. Olivia Says:

    Bubbles, this is mind blowing! What a beautiful write to express yearning and want!!

    I loved the metaphors- ecstatic they were..
    butterflies of time
    let them dry the tears
    ashes of ancient myths
    I am beginning to rise on the steam of these words.. :)

    Thanks for sharing this treat right in the morning.. :D

    Hugs xox

  2. Reflections Says:

    Stunning imagery found within the longing of the heart.

  3. Jamie Dedes Says:

    What a sizzling poem, Blaga. Quite a ride one takes on that imagery. Exotic and sensual. Good job! :-)

  4. Eric 'Bubba' Alder Says:

    Wow! This is superb! Such passion!

  5. Artswebshow Says:

    Excellent poem.
    The imagery is very subtle.
    Truly we probably prefer not to meet the person of our dreams

  6. Jingle Says:


    beautiful words…


  7. Lyn Says:

    Pure desire..and memory goes on forever…lovely!

  8. deadpoet88 Says:

    Amazing Bee! This one leaves me speechless, I absolutely love it! It has this far away romantic and passionate ring to it, oh I love how you write romantic poetry. The imagery is superb! Great piece!

  9. A.B. Thomas Says:

    Stunning write! Subtle yet overpowering in the images it evokes!

  10. Jessica Says:

    I enjoyed that, Blaga. I like the phrase ‘pearls of a kiss’.
    Nice choice of song too, she has an awesome voice!

  11. eclipseofthemoon Says:

    Beautifully expressed passion…Brilliant poem!

  12. Chimnese Says:

    i like the opening line about the dragon and the myths….this was as always mind boggeling…i love your poetry

  13. ladynimue Says:

    Oh dear ,, the image was a perfect compliment to the words !! Loveeeed your lines !

  14. danroberson Says:

    Blaga, you did it again! Impressive and beautiful!

  15. KRM Says:

    Oh, where to start! Such beautiful imagery and metaphor all combined. Each transition was smooth and inviting. Absolutely breathtaking.

  16. liv2write2day Says:

    As others have said, I really enjoyed the subtle expression of passion. And thanks for the intro to another outstanding Blaga, another poetess from Bulgaria. I so enjoy the opportunity we have in this world of blogging to be friends with people and share the talent of others from all over.

  17. David (1MereMortal) Says:

    A magical…captivating write. Bravo.

  18. cloakedmonk Says:

    I love the line “butterflies of time.” Wonderful!


    Lovely one Blaga , absolutely loved the romantic images and the superb emotions here,You have a blessed pen and a lovely muse, Hey, I am part of this poem too–so glad of being connected to such a unique composition.

    BTW I am answering your questions and will get back to you soon.

  20. Umamaheswari.A Says:

    butterflies of time
    let them dry the tears

    colors of the sea
    let them wash the salt

    All words are beautifully penned down….lovely poem

  21. Cherlyn Says:

    Holy guacamole! This was amazing! I absolutely adored the passion, the emotions, the flow of the stanzas – just amazing! Great work!

  22. Mr. Watson Says:

    This is Great !

  23. liv2write2day Says:

    This is a song in its own right. I especially love the 2nd stanza.

  24. Andy McDonald Says:

    What can I say that hasn’t been said? I can only concur that this is a brilliant poem with beautiful imagery and brilliantly captured emotion. Great write!

  25. seabell Says:

    “the pearls of a kiss” Do I have to say more?

  26. Andy Says:

    Sensual & captivating.

    Nicely done, Blaga.

  27. mindlovemisery Says:

    This is just stunning and it has a wonderful graceful flow. I love Alanis Morrisette

  28. Fred Says:

    Very nice, I do not know the song, but you had me at dragon’s. Some wonderfully creative lines in here, butterflies of time, pearls of a kiss, and the last full stanza works so well. Thanks for sharing

  29. Becca Givens Says:

    Beautifully knitted and woven – Blaga!

  30. halfwaybetweenthegutter Says:

    Gorgeous, very well written and captures the imagination.

  31. Sam Says:

    Blaga, your words invite me to a dreamy world… love it

  32. Kalahari blues Says:

    until there is the rain -lovely !

  33. Jaan Pehchaan Says:

    Wrought with emotion – very well written!

  34. Chimnese Says:

    the heart always long for something, someone to love and to remain with them for eternity…

  35. pure2core Says:

    Amazing one…I loved it so much…..There’s no words left to say, everyone has emptied their heart to the comments….

  36. Kay Salady Says:

    Stunning poem. Thank you!

  37. lizbethsgarden Says:

    Wow! Just amazing.

  38. alexvonfox Says:

    I have to say – I really liked this one – I look forward to reading more from you.

  39. Someone is Special Says:

    very beautiful blaga..here is my song, Somebody’s me

    Someone is Special

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