When the winter ends

When the winter ends …

Am I still here? I think I am. Where? Why?
In a room with snowflakes, blue curtains and cold almost divine.
It’s a game for the eyes. No, a trap for the mind.

White tulips. Beautiful, but not real. Fake.
Ordered to be given, but never sent.
Do I want to escape? I want. No. Maybe. I don’t know. Uh.

Confusion. Confidence. Do I have them?
The exit. There. Nothing on the way.
Voice. Saying quietly. No. Screaming. Does it matter?

Do I want to hear? No. I tried before. It hurts.
Words, never found. Promises, raw wind passing by.
I go. No. I stop. Step, two and I’m back.

I want to stay. I can’t. Am I sure?
How do I reach the door? Faraway. Dark behind.
Strength. Zero. Air. Shadows. Ignorance.

I need a hand. I think I do. Five fingers to hold on to.
When? Today. Before light. Before the snow dries the sun.
How? Alone. Reaching doors safely closed and …

Kiss. Not yours. Not now. Not tomorrow.
When the snow melts. When the winter ends.
When the green leaves erase my grief and your face.


Image by Josh Olson


© 2010  Broken Sparkles


23 Responses to “When the winter ends”

  1. Artswebshow Says:

    this is excellent.
    confusion a strong ingredient in this one

  2. Evelyn Says:

    each word grabs you.
    fun stuff

  3. Jingle Says:

    love the image,
    when the day is cold, we do get confused and saddened…

  4. Tom Baker Says:

    Very nice Blaga. The harsh coldness of winter can be felt in your every word!

  5. Stephen Kellogg Says:

    Winter can be sad, cold, and lonely. I love how your poem express the back and forth between emotions and thought. I could feel the struggle. Winter can also bring a lot of beauty too; it all depends on where things are for you at the time.

    Great writing, keep it up!!



  6. Jamie Dedes, all rights reserved Says:

    A very artful froth of confustion. Well done, Blaga! Nice chose of photo too.

    Hope you are having a good one and listening to some great music.


  7. Jamie Dedes, all rights reserved Says:

    Haven’t been back on email, but woke up and I’m making some middle of the night visits to blogs and I see you all over inviting folks to join our JP fun. Good for you. Fabulous … you’re on it. Ji must be so pleased. Thanks for email me the second time.

  8. Kelly Hay Says:

    Very powerfully written!

  9. Cherlyn Says:

    Wow this is amazing! Sorry for stopping by late, I had made a note to myself and I lost it *facepalm*. This is amazing, I love the usage of short sentences, it makes it feel disjointed, confusing, and I think it is really effective here. Great job!

  10. Talon Says:

    I really liked this…like peeking inside someone’s mind. The last line was heartbreaking…

  11. Jingle Says:

    love your curiosity here.
    very elegantly done…
    Glad to see you in the rally.
    Have a blessed new year.


  12. Someone Is Special Says:

    wonderfully done.. Here is mine, ! Wishes !

    Happy Rally, Wish you a very Happy New Year 2011 !

    –Someone is Special–

  13. LeiffyV Says:

    Wow, very nice. I could feel the confusion and self doubt in the piece, made me feel a lot of emotions throughout. Fantastic work, thanks for sharing this with us!

  14. A Fistful Of Moonbeams Says:

    delightful new year starter!

  15. orange Says:

    Beautiful… lonely and so alive… amazing poem! keep ’em coming!

  16. Olivia Says:

    I know you like summers.. :)
    Blaga Girl, here in India, summers are sticky so I kind of look forward to “freeze” in winters- LOLsss
    No snow or chills- not technically. It used to be worse in growing years. The weather used to go freezing through October till March.. Not anymore.. Barely a few days in December through January now.. :(

    You have expressed you mind in the most surreal manner.. I always love reading your words.. different and yet sparkling with Life.. :)

    Here’s to my Blaga Bubble (I see you smile since you say it makes you smile)-
    Wishing you a wonderful New Year ahead xoxox

  17. Vishwas Anand Says:

    Your poem is giving me the shivers;)Well-done!Happy new year!

  18. Carl Says:

    I loved this. I had some fear and loneliness – It is powerful.

  19. thingy Says:

    It’s really powerful. Terrific.

  20. David (1MereMortal) Says:

    I could feel the struggle within this passionate poem…thank you for sharing.

  21. Británny Herrada Says:

    I really like the form of this poem but the excessive use of periods didn’t really seem to work on this one….I’ve done the same thing in poems before but I think it would make it much stronger to use some more active words and stronger imagery. Much of this poem is very passive and the abrupt stops end up like road blocks instead of short moments of contemplation for the reader. Nice work and keep playing with the form.

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