Please

Please

The scream inside of me leads me to insanity,
the sound of it somewhat withdrawn and so unreal blurs it all.

The voice out loud I tried to reach you with, but never did.
The words so clearly said, not with letters but with sigh,
I beg you, please don’t send them back to me,
I have no space in my soul to fit them in.

The ocean that’s ahead of me so deep, so unsurpassed,
the mountain that’s in front of you an obstacle so high,
I ask you please don’t make me swim, don’t make me climb,
I have no strength, no breath or desire left for this.

I speak. No. I whisper, with my lips sealed with your last kiss.
I want to say. No. I won’t. My hope will fly to tell you,
that time difference has captured me in prison
and my nights fractured into two, have no end and no start either.

And when the sun goes down here, please,
please wake up and come to me.

 

"Please" by Phoenix--x

"Please" by Phoenix--x

 

© 2010  Broken Sparkles


69 Responses to “Please”

  1. Luke Prater Says:

    Nice work. Thanks for the visit

    Luke x

  2. woih Says:

    wow! That’s an intense writing there.

    “please wake up and come to me!”

    May we all find our way home..

  3. dan Says:

    Who can resist a request like this? Your urgency and anguish are intense. I love this poem.

    • Scent of my heart Says:

      There are people that are doing just fine with the resistance ! :) Have a good evening Dan… or day.

  4. Cherlyn Says:

    I adore this poem – I love the sense of despair and pleading that it gives, it really tugs at my heartstrings. I really love all of it, especially the last line “And when the sun goes down here, please, please wake up and come to me!” Great job again!

  5. Jingle Says:

    powerful emotions,
    what a shout out…
    well done.
    love the image…
    Happy Rally.

  6. Carl Says:

    This was excellent. I loved it. I’ve felt this and you relay it intensely.

  7. Tootsie Says:

    Amazing writing here!!! Loved every line

  8. A.B. Thomas Says:

    Fantastic write!

  9. Caribbean Fool Says:

    Lot of emotion packed in there. Not sure if it is supposed to be read as desperation or singular desire, but works well either way. Very much captures the reader. Excellent rally entry, was glad to see you writing more! Later gater,

    crb.

  10. 1MereMortal Says:

    I could feel the need, struggle, and despair…a beautiful and stirring poem of love and desire. Thank you for sharing.

  11. Olivia Says:

    Here my Bubble, I am here.. :)
    Wishing you a very very sweet evening Dear.. It’s crazy at my end with friends, weddings and travel.. Meeting over lot of people- I am kind of going crazy- I am kind of ME person.. But I am loving it!!

    Sending you a sweet one xox

  12. WordsWorthMillions Says:

    Sad poem amiga, such pain and nostalgia.

    :)

  13. Sumit Sarkar Says:

    Great poem you painted with beautiful words…

    “I whisper, with my lips sealed with your last kiss.” I love this line :)

  14. liv2write2day Says:

    A cry of desperation coming from deep within. But tinged with hope, just barely.

    My rally: http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/12/16/duality/

  15. Fatima Iqbal Says:

    I love this, its amazing :)( I can relate…well Happy Rally, cehck mines out when u have time! http://fearlessdreams.wordpress.com/2010/12/07/realize/

  16. booguloo Says:

    That’s quite a dream(?)

  17. Jamie Dedes, all rights reserved Says:

    So much raw intensity here, Blaga. I had to read it several times. It takes my breath away. Some interesting phrasing, which I particularly like (time difference has captured me in a prison=just one example). The repetitions give it strenght a certain credibility. Bravo! I’m impressed.

    Thanks for sharing this for Rally.

  18. seoulaja Says:

    what a beautiful one…
    this poem really lovely…
    Really well said..
    this poem really show what i feel now…

  19. Kristen Haskell Says:

    This poem does tug at the heartstrings. Nice job.

  20. orange Says:

    Ah… longingness and pain… great to see your work..

  21. The Reason You Come Says:

    I love this! The yearning can be felt by the reader. I certainly felt it! It talks about a love so passionate and so intense. I can most definitely relate to this. And these lines almost made me cry:
    “And when the sun goes down here, please,
    please wake up and come to me!”

  22. Glory Says:

    good job!

  23. Words4aFriend Says:

    nice powerful and emotional, excellent as always my friend.

  24. thoughtsnotlost Says:

    Packed with emotion and lovely.

  25. iBeingMe Says:

    Emotional !!!
    great work. Cheers !!

  26. Hema Says:

    Lovely poem.very intense. Love the phrase ” I have no space in my soul to fit them in”. Wonderful.

  27. Julie Jordan Scott Says:

    I love this line. I have felt and lived it, too.

    Well done!

    I am grateful I found you today via the Poet’s Rally!

  28. Shaun Says:

    These 4 lines are really excellent.

    “I speak. No. I whisper, with my lips sealed with your last kiss.
    I want to say. No. I won’t. My hope will fly to tell you,
    that time difference has captured me in prison
    and my nights fractured into two, have no end and no start either.”

    Very well done!

  29. Leo (Leonnyes) Says:

    hi Blaga, I can relate to that first line. Lots of screams in my mind too!

    Lots of lovely lines and images in the poem. Well said! :)

  30. belladonna23 Says:

    wow, i love the emotion here. lots of dormant passion finally breaking out into that last line…. great rally entry


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